Just made this.. Tell me what you think

Just made this off the top of my head.. made the lyrics as i went along and it was pretty random.. but tell me what u think.. i want to see if its worth fixing up and working on.. thanks :)

http://iamtpain.smule.com/mysongs/track/682714

Hey, I like the lyrics, could you sing it without the harmony on. Id like to hear your voice better. The beginning is a little distorted and hard to make out the words. I think it has potential. Just a little more tweeking... :-)